Reflection on Project 3 Draft

For the peer review process I reviewed Michael B and Chloe's drafts.  I will now be discussing my thoughts on the drafting process.

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1. Who reviewed my draft?

Casey and Sam reviewed my draft.

2. What did you think and/or feel about the feedback?

I was not surprised about the feedback.  My draft is pretty rough and I wasn't super confident about where I wanted to go with it.  After talking to Mr. Bottai and reading the reviews, I am basically in the process of rewriting everything I had previously written.  Everyone seemed to like the personal narratives I touched on in the draft, so I will definitely be going more towards those in the final draft.  It will allow me to create a much more personal understanding of the issue while still showing my credibility on the subject.  I was definitely struggling trying to find the balance between explaining concepts to the audience and writing an argument.  After a couple of weeks of avoiding coming off too biased or strongly about my opinions, this is a total 180 degree flip to only my opinions in a piece.

3.  What needs work (Audience, Purpose, Argumentation, Genre)?

First off, I will not be starting off with the Pope, he is just not as relevant to my opinion for the length of the piece.  My essay focus is going to be altered to talking about solely why environmental activism is beneficial and my personal experiences with the issue.  Instead of providing a ton of background and broad information, I will be able to talk directly to the audience about why this issue is important.  My argument was almost non-existent in my draft, so changing to a narrative will almost certainly allow me to focus on my main persuasive argument.  I also drifted to closely to the piece becoming a QRG, which again will be solved by personal opinions and lots of hopefully beautiful images.

4. How am I feeling about the project direction?

I am feeling a lot more inspired about what I can write for this project.  I was dreading revisions of this draft ever since I sat down to write it.  After the reviews and conversation I definitely feel a lot more interested in my creative argument and how I should go about writing this project.  Writing an opinionated piece and explaining personal stories and experiences can be a little more interesting than listening and analyzing hours and hours of Pope speeches.