Revised Conclusion

In this blog I will provide my original and my revised conclusion of my Project 2 essay.  I tried to change up my conclusion a lot more, as it did not give a clear sense of finality.  I am still not 100% confident about it, but I feel like it is also more clear.  There were several comments about how earlier paragraphs seemed more final than conclusion, so I will try to move some of that momentum back down to the end of the essay.

Original:

Turrentine’s use of rhetorical strategies are the most successful when the audience of the article is liberal.  Although he uses enough context, factual evidence, and credible sources, his relatively informal tone combined with the deeply moral nature of the issue will be a turn-off to those who oppose the Pope’s words.  Still, when finding and analyzing the rhetorical strategies for the audience of an environmentally active newsgroup, the audience Turrentine writes for is likely to be persuaded of the change in cultural climate the Pope will produce. His strong appeals to the moral beliefs of the audience, his credible analysis of culture in the United States, and his great attention to clear factual detail are his most effective strategies.  

Revised:

Turrentine’s connection to his liberal audience is his strongest rhetorical advantage.  Writing for the audience of an environmentally active newsgroup allows for Turrentine to focus on convincing his audience of the potential of the Pope’s actions to benefit climate change rather than convincing his audience climate change exists.  Although he used a comprehensive amount of context, factual evidence, and credible sources, his informal tone discussing such a deeply complicated moral issue is a turn-off to those who are conflicted by or oppose the Pope’s actions.  Still, when analyzing how his rhetorical strategies affect his majority liberal audience, his strong moral appeals to the audience, credible analysis of US culture, and his attention to providing clear factual details are his most effective strategies.